Very nice storytelling here, descriptive aand enticing - love observations like this
'It was four in the afternoon. I counted three other people in the car: a man with long sideburns, a girl in a red hat reading a book, the woman with the giant umbrella. They looked irritated but not irate. After all, the metro breaking down in Paris was an all too common occurrence.'
I wrote a subway short story on my Substack - writers do observe well, check out 'street punks' if you fancy a read - and keep up the great writing! Fiction Attic :)
Excellent writing. Clean and colorful. It really draws the reader in.
Very nice storytelling here, descriptive aand enticing - love observations like this
'It was four in the afternoon. I counted three other people in the car: a man with long sideburns, a girl in a red hat reading a book, the woman with the giant umbrella. They looked irritated but not irate. After all, the metro breaking down in Paris was an all too common occurrence.'
I wrote a subway short story on my Substack - writers do observe well, check out 'street punks' if you fancy a read - and keep up the great writing! Fiction Attic :)
Thank you for taking the time to comment, David! I will pass this on to the young writer! I loved the line "They looked irritated but not irate" too.
I will go read your subway story!